What is illustrated in the pie chart demonstrates that obvious differences have occurred in respect of college students‘ options upon graduation。 Based upon the data offered, what we cannot fail to see is that finding jobs accounts for the largest proportion, which is 83%。 Meanwhile, the percentages of going for further education ,going abroad and doing pioneering work are 8.8%, 3.2% and 5% respectively。 What is reflected in the chart is most thought-provoking and worth discussing among the general public for the time being。
The contributing factors responsible for this phenomenon can be summarized as follows。 To begin with, the spirit of challenge is missing among most university students。 As is indicated in the chart above, the majority of students regard finding jobs as their top ideal career option。 The very fact shows that now most university students lack the confidence and courage to face hardships and difficulties in terms of doing pioneering work。 In the second place, we may notice that competition also plays an important role in leading to this phenomenon。 The present society is filled with fierce competition and most college students are under great pressure。 Therefore diploma is viewed as the most important factor in terms of their standards, which makes the increasing number of students would like to pursuit further study。 There may be other factors contributing to this phenomenon, but I think what has been mentioned above is generally reasonable。
Taking into account what has been argued ,we can come to the conclusion that some necessary measures should be taken to make the correct choice among university students。 For one thing, a widespread education campaign must be launched to popularize correct options。 For another, a healthy social environment should be created so as to guide the development of students’ mind。 Only in these ways can university students encounter obstacles of all sorts and reach the summit of success in our harmonious society。
1 Based upon the data offered, we can see that-> Based upon the data offered, what we cannot fail to see is that。。。
注釋:what we cannot fail to see is that 是we can see that 的高級表達。“依據(jù)所提供的數(shù)據(jù),我們可以看到。。。”
2 Meanwhile, the percentages of going for further education -> Meanwhile, it is pronounced that the percentages of going for further education
注釋:It is pronounced that。。。是萬能句首擴充,表示:“顯而易見的是,。。。”
3 we may notice that。。。also plays an important role in leading to this phenomenon。 “我們也許會注意到。。。。。。在導致這個現(xiàn)象中起著重要的作用。”
寫作模板:
首段描圖:What is illustrated in the pie chart demonstrates that obvious differences have occurred in respect of 主題(名詞短語)。 Based upon the data offered, what we cannot fail to see is that XXX accounts for the largest proportion, which is/are 數(shù)值 。 Meanwhile, it is pronounced that the percentages of 對比對象 1,2,3 are 數(shù)值1,2,3 respectively。
The contributing factors responsible for this phenomenon can be summarized as follows。/It is no difficulty for us to come up with several possible reasons to account for this phenomenon。 “原因如下:。。。”
There may be other factors contributing to this phenomenon, but I think what has been mentioned above is generally reasonable。